कोटा के शुरुआती दौर की उलझन।।
बंद कपाट
सूखा ललाट
अक्खड़पन सब उखड़ गया
पंछी पिंजरे मे पड़ गया ।।
पूर्ण परिवर्तन की चाह
बङी कठिन यह राह
नीर नयन में
सपना जना और मर गया
पंछी पिंजरे में पड़ गया ।।
नियति की चोट
नियत में खोट
वर्षों से सींचा जो बाग
क्षण मे उजङ गया
पंछी पिंजरे मे पड़ गया ।।
और दो साल बाद –
पिंजरे का खुला द्वार
यशोगान कीर्ति अपार
पंछी लगा नए पर गया
उडान ऊँची भर गया ।
क्षितिज अभी दूर
राह के रोड़े मंजूर
परिंदा वादे यही कर गया
उडान ऊँची भर गया ।
नियति का खेल
परिश्रम से मेल
क़फ़स में कल संवर गया
पंछी उड़ान ऊँची भर गया ।
पुनश्च: आप सभी मित्रों के प्रति आभार व्यक्त करता हूँ की महज दस दिनों की अवधि में ही आपने मुझे 100 फौलोवर्स की संख्या को छूने का अवसर दिया😁। उम्मीद है कि आपका यह प्रेम बरकरार रहेगा।😄 बहुत धन्यवाद ☺☺
श्रेष्ठ काव्य😊😊😊👏👏👏👏👏👏
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बहुत शुक्रिया मुकांशु जी😊
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😊😊
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Beautifully expressed those days of struggle and experiences.
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yes. now i cherish those days of me being an aspirant only😂😂
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These things do happen😬
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Sahi likha hai aapne…
Me bhi aapke he sath tha..
Me Kota ka rehne wala hi hu…
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dhanyawaad
kota ke apne do saal me kaafi evolve hua hu
hamesha vigyaan nagar yaad rahega😊
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Haan.. zindigi ke anmol 2 saal
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Nicely expressed
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thanks 😊
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Kya baat hai. Badhaiyaan. 😀
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shukriya ☺☺
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उत्तम अभिव्यक्ति!!
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thanks mam keep visiting
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बहुत सुंदर👍
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शुभ कामनाएँ💐💐
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shukriya
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Hey Vaibhav !! Nice to meet you and thanks for stopping by on my blog and giving it follow. Wonderful post I must say.
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thanks payal ji
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Kota me rahe aur wahan se nikale sabhi in panktiyon ki gawahi denge. Khoob kaha.
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dhanyawaad rupali ji
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vaibhav…wonderfully written and ur dp is amazing…gr8 show it seems
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धन्यवाद . हाँ एक कवि सम्मलेन था दिल्ली में
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R u from delhi…I m going to kavita sammelan too😊
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student hu yahi par
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Well done….very impressive peace.
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thanks 😊
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Excellent !
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धन्यवाद उपेन्द्र जी आते रहिएगा ब्लॉग पर
नया हूँ आपकी प्रतिक्रिया बहुत महत्वपूर्ण है
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जी ज़रूर ! नया तो मै भी हूँ श्रीमान /
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बहुत खूब
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Aapka blog humee bahut pasand hai. Aapki Shayari bhi mast hai …
Nominating you for the Lovely Blog Award
Congrats 🙂
Link to the nomination
https://sreepriyamenon.wordpress.com/2017/04/05/lovely-blog-award-thank-you/?preview_id=9372&preview_nonce=2e3ed7a266
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Amazing Bhai,made me remember the days I worked hard to get the seat! Exceptionally well expressed
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kaha hai aap av
iit me hi ya pass out ho gaye?
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IIT nahi bhai, I meant the days I worked hard to get a medical seat,uske liye bhi mehnat karni padhi thi.Abhi final yr of MBBS me hu 🙂
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ok ☺
mehnat to barabar hi karni parti hai chahe engineer ho chahe doctor ho😊
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Very well expressed. Beautiful
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shukriya
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Even I was in kota Preparing for my pre medical exams and I could totally relate to it Vaibhaw. Great work!
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thanks☺
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Nice
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thanks avdhesh ji
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Wonderful lines Vaibhaw. The second last stanza was just mind blowing. 🙂
Keep writing!!!
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thanks😊
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Amazing. Really well written
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Kota Jannat hai 💕
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bahut hi behtarin kavita likhi hai apne bahut umda
ye unki apni kahani, kahani keh gaya
lo fir ek baar parinda uchi udaan bhar gaya
jo saalo se kaid tha apne hi andar
aaj fir Qalam utha ke apne Zazbaat keh gaya
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KYA BAAT HAI
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soothing vaibhav !! tough day were described in a dulcet way..
umda to aap likhte hain bahoot!!
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bas aap logo ki dua hai or pyaar hai warna main to bas Khaak hun or kuch nahi
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I’d love to read your poem, but I can’t seem to translate it. In 1999, my husband and I were in India and met some wonderful believers there! It was the first time I was in such a different culture and the experience was good! Blessings to you! Thanks for following!
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Just wanted to say thank you for the Follow, Vaibhaw. So sorry that I cannot read Hindi.
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I prepared for the IITs too… luckily i failed it miserably
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Do you think this kind of preparations and system will help to be a complete human ,getting into IIT or medical ,through these type of coaching classes always made me think that we are making robots not humans
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Many of us could relate to this one someway or the other..may it be IIT, CAT, CET. You have perfectly captured all the emotional turmoil ☺
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thanks, i am glad u could relate
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What is the context? Is it about the Kota prep route?
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yes, almost based on my two years there
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I like the hints the computer translator gave me. A destiny game does seem hard, but promises in the cafe do seem to have reached fruition so that the birds could grow strong, escape their cages and fly high into the destiny behind the clouds.
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thanks i will try to translate from the next time
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Kya bat hai…..lajawab…..
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Vaibhav Sir, I became a fan of your writings. Wonderfully written. Thanks for the lovely poem.
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बहुत अच्छा जोड़ा आपने अतीत, वर्तमान और उम्मीद को। उम्दा लेखन! कफ़स का अर्थ समझाये बाकि सब बुझ गया 🙂
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कफ़स – पिंजरा😊😊
आते रहिएगा भाई जी
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नियति का खेल,
परिश्रम से मेल।
बहुत उत्कृष्ट भाव….यथार्थता का बोध🙏
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shukriya aate rahiyega blog par
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हाँ निश्चित ही…. धन्यवाद
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Great one
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Namaste!
Thankyou for reading my blog and appreciating it!
You write from the heart and it is amazing!
Happy Last Days Of June 🙂
aur accha laga jaankar ki aap hindi mein itni sundarta se apne bhav prakat karte hain!
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shukriya nishita ji
aate rahiyega blog par badi khushi hui aapki rai jaankar😊
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Zaroor! Aap likhte hi itna accha hain ki baar-baar padne ka man karta hain. 🙂 Happy last days of June!
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Vaibhaw…how beautifully you have expressed those days of struggle ….struggling to make a mark…and you have been able to do it successfully. गज़ब के भाव है और simile and metaphors superb👍
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shukriya aapka ki aapne bhaavon ko bilkul shi bhaamp liya 😊
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This is amazing !
#BigFan of your writing !
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बेहतरीन पंक्तियाँ लिखी हैं
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शुक्रिया मैम
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Beautifully expressed 😎😎
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shukriya 😊😊
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shukriya😊😊
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Bahot khub
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शुक्रिया आपका
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Bahut acha hai
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शुक्रिया
ब्लाॅग पर आपका सदैव स्वागत है
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😊
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बहुत बेहतरीन वैभव जी…हक़ीकत को बेहतरीन प्रस्तुति मिली है!!👍
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धन्यवाद आपका 😊
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